Feedback on first draft of script

- the blackout at the start while rodney is rushing in - why do you want to use the blackouts? Prehaps better just fast camera whips? Watch various similar moments in other films and dont forget to blog about this !- perhaps cut down on what teacher says in scene 1? but no so bad if you dont want to do this either-i like the way scene 1 ends - very funny- the rest seems good to me. i like the slo mo while he comes in with the carrot stake - hilarious ok so go ahead and storyboard carefully making sure you use loads of interesting shot sizes and anlges etc. watch other things before you do this. good work guys !